not sure whether the dreamworld references make sense in the larger context of novel or are intentionally opaque -- the latter is characteristic of collegiate writing in my opinion -- but the sex scene is very nicelt done and many of the images have a nice poetic quality.

Menh, I don't really buy all this "not having the strength to resist" stuff. "Where does your responsibility begin?" - this is what he is thinking about? At a certain point the character would obviously just decide to let it happen, to take advantage of the situation, even if only in a bewildered, semi-awake way. The character certainly is awake enough in the first three paragraphs to know there is something questionable about the situation, even given its surreality. It would have been darker, more interesting, if choice had been emphasized rather than all this ambivalence and passivity. People being drawn to act on their darker impulses is always interesting; passivity, not so much.